Randy, a zoologist, was in the middle of studying a new breed of goldfish. This particular fish was discovered off the coast of Africa. The fish was brown, with eyes that popped out of its head. He planned a trip to sail to the coast of Africa, but when trying to climb the ladder he fell and hit his head. He felt terrible almost the whole trip. But when he arrived, and looked out the window, a bunch of the fish flew out of the water slowly. He studied the mysterious fish, and won a prestigious reward for his research.
Poor man! That latter really ruined his trip. However, he did win an award. That’s fantastic! Great story!
Great detail! I hope he found lots of research about the new fish!
Good job, Alexia. Your story was creative. I liked the fact that the man ended up happy, even though he hit his head. Overall, though, your story was great.
i really enjoyed your story about the discovery of the the new breed of goldfish
Great story! However, I dont understand how he fell of a ladder if he was sailing to Africa.
Happy Birthday!
Dear Alexia, great job! Your story was very interesting and it hooked me in. Also, I like that you highlighted the words instead of leaving them just black. However, you could have used more transitional phrases to make your story better. But overall, HAPPY BIRTHDAY, and 2 POINTS!!!
I loved this story all the words were used correctly. This was just magnificent. One question i had was how he fell if the ladder. But other than that it was amazing. Brilliant job. 100 points
Randy should of placed the ladder correctly so he could be safe but great story Alexia.